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1. food diet
In order to increase the health, We have to decide a food diet.
It is much better eat fruits and vegetables rather than instant food.
but, It's doesn't lose weight easily even if we don't have a lot of muscles in our body.
Therefore, we have to eat foods containing protein to be healthy.

2. workout
It is good to go to the gym and exercise, but it costs a lot of money.
These days, more people watch videos and exercise at home.
It is good to workout use money, but It's also good to do aerobic exercise to gain muscle at home.

3. sleep
In order to be health, but It is important to sleep. The average adult sleep time is 8 hours,
and appropriate to sleep in 8-10 hours. If we sleep a lot,
skin gets better, and It is beneficial to health because it improves complexion.

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1. food diet
In order to increase the health, We have to decide a food diet.
>>> In order to improve health, we have to decide a good diet.
It is much better eat fruits and vegetables rather than instant food.
>>> It is much better to eat fruits and vegetables rather than instant food.
but, It's doesn't lose weight easily even if we don't have a lot of muscles in our body.
>>> However, it doesn't make us lose weight easily even if we don't have a lot of muscles in our body.
Therefore, we have to eat foods containing protein to be healthy.
>>>  correct

2. workout
It is good to go to the gym and exercise, but it costs a lot of money.
>>> correct
These days, more people watch videos and exercise at home.
>>> correct
It is good to workout use money, but It's also good to do aerobic exercise to gain muscle at home.
>>> It is good to workout with the use of money, but It's also good to do aerobic exercise to gain muscle at home.
>>> It is good to spend money for working out, but It's also good to do aerobic exercise to gain muscle at home.

3. sleep
In order to be health, but It is important to sleep. 
>>> In order to be healthy, it is important to sleep well. 
The average adult sleep time is 8 hours, and appropriate to sleep in 8-10 hours. 
>>> The average adult sleep time is 8 hours, and it's appropriate to sleep within 8-10 hours. 
If we sleep a lot, skin gets better, and It is beneficial to health because it improves complexion.
>>> If we sleep a lot, our skin gets better and It is beneficial to health because it improves complexion.
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