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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Would you prefer to live in a snowy place or a desert?

It's like a balance game to choose between living in the desert or living in snowy place.
If I choose a hot desert or snowy place, I will choose a snowy area.
The reason why there are many kinds of desert on Earth.
But, in most deserts, people don't live in there.
Because, desert areas are not suitable for people to live in.
And the next reason is there are four season in my country, so I can experience all the weather.
The reason why I choice a snow area is that among the four season, I hate summer season.
So, that's why I prefer to live in a snowy place.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Would you prefer to live in a snowy place or a desert?


It's like a balance game to choose between living in the desert or living in snowy place.
>> It's like a balance game to choose between living in the desert or living in a snowy place.
If I choose a hot desert or snowy place, I will choose a snowy area.
>> CORRECT!
The reason why there are many kinds of desert on Earth.
>> The reason is that there are many kinds of desert on Earth.
But, in most deserts, people don't live in there.
>> CORRECT!
Because, desert areas are not suitable for people to live in.
>> CORRECT!
And the next reason is there are four season in my country, so I can experience all the weather.
>> And the next reason is that there are four seasons in my country, so I can experience all the weathers.
The reason why I choice a snow area is that among the four season, I hate summer season.
>> The reason why I chose a snowy area is that among the four seasons, I hate the summer season.
So, that's why I prefer to live in a snowy place.
>> CORRECT!
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