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Accomplishing a something like going a university that I want or getting a good grade makes me happy. Because I feel that I receive a reward about my efforts. And this makes me live lively and challenge to other things. More I get a successful experience, more I will be confident. So, if I have an chance to accomplish something, I will do my best.

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Hello Ku Tae, beautiful day to you. Thank you for taking the time to make your composition. I'm glad you have so many reasons to be happy. Keep that spirit alive. We will talk more in class. I will see you then. Have a great day to you. Stay warm! ~T. Lyn
Accomplishing a something like going a university that I want or getting a good grade makes me happy. 
>>Achieving thins like going to the university I want and getting good grades make me happy.
Because I feel that I receive a reward about my efforts. 
>>This is because I feel rewarded for my efforts.
And this makes me live lively and challenge to other things. 
>>And this what keeps makes me active and challenge to do different things.
More I get a successful experience, more I will be confident. 
>>The more successful experiences I have, the more confident I become.
So, if I have an chance to accomplish something, I will do my best.
>>So when I get a chance to accomplish something, I will do my best.
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