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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do earthquakes happen?

The cause of earthquakes is that the earth's crust always moves.
When different earth crust meet or crush with each land as the ground moves and shake.
It's earthquakes occur.
I think what's scary about earthquakes is that we don't know when earthquakes happen.
So, it's difficult to evacuate when an earthquake occurs.
In addition, sometimes earthquakes can be accompanied by tsunamis.
A typical example is an earthquake in Japan in 2011.
There was a big damage because of the earthquake and tsunami.
That's why I think earthquakes are the scariest among all kinds of disasters.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do earthquakes happen?


The cause of earthquakes is that the earth's crust always moves.
>> CORRECT!
When different earth crust meet or crush with each land as the ground moves and shake.
It's earthquakes occur.
>> When different earth's crusts meet or crush with each land as the ground moves and shakes, earthquakes occur.
I think what's scary about earthquakes is that we don't know when earthquakes happen.
>> CORRECT!
So, it's difficult to evacuate when an earthquake occurs.
>> CORRECT!
In addition, sometimes earthquakes can be accompanied by tsunamis.
>> CORRECT!
A typical example is an earthquake in Japan in 2011.
>> CORRECT!
There was a big damage because of the earthquake and tsunami.
>> CORRECT!
That's why I think earthquakes are the scariest among all kinds of disasters.
>> CORRECT!
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