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If the government tax sugary and caffeinated drinks, I think they should tax the company that makes those drinks. In the end, the tax burden will end up to the public. It could be essential for the people who eat and drink these things to maintain a busy life. So I can not agree this kind of taxes.

And it would be good for the people to have a lot of proper and healthy food by imposing less taxes on companies that make healthy beverage products. The most important thing is that many companies should try to manufacture the healthy products. So people can drink and eat with no worries.

I think, it will be great to set drinks for adults which have a certain mount of sugar and caffeine like alcohol drinks.
Because it doesn't make sense for kids or teenagers to drink them with no guideline.

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Thank you for this Ms. Tina!

If the government tax sugary and caffeinated drinks, I think they should tax the company that makes those drinks. 
>>> correct   
In the end, the tax burden will end up to the public. 
>>>  correct    
It could be essential for the people who eat and drink these things to maintain a busy life. 
>>>  correct    
So I can not agree this kind of taxes.
>>>  ORSo I cannot agree to this kind of tax. 
And it would be good for the people to have a lot of proper and healthy food by imposing less taxes on companies that make healthy beverage products.
>>> OR:  Instead, it would be good for the people to have a lot of proper and healthy food by imposing less taxes on companies that make healthy beverage products.  
 The most important thing is that many companies should try to manufacture the healthy products. 
>>>   correct     
So people can drink and eat with no worries.
>>>   correct     
I think, it will be great to set drinks for adults which have a certain mount of sugar and caffeine like alcohol drinks. Because it doesn't make sense for kids or teenagers to drink them with no guideline.
>>>   I think, it will be great to set drinks for adults which have a certain amount of sugar and caffeine like alcohol drinks because it doesn't make sense for kids or teenagers to drink them with no guideline.  
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