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Can you tell me the concept of tourism?

작성자: 정*환
2023-11-29 346

회원님의 영작문

Good morning Chammy.
I really had a good time to talk about break even point this morning.
I will practice the sentences that you taught me.

"Can you tell me the concept of tourism?"
When I got the question above, I was really in bad and serious tension.
I heard the word of concept many times but I wasn't able to clarify it.
So I tried again.

Concept of tourism means kind of travel.
But there should be a condition to define it.
The point is travelers should leave home and enjoy seesight, having meals out side of their home.
After that those travelers must go back to their house.
If travelers don't come back to their home, it wouldn't be a tourism but for movement.

Even though I made the sentence shortly, I might be good answer I believe.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello there, Han!
I guess the sentence "the travelers must go back to their houses" was on point in defining tourism. Based on what I remember back in college, Tourism includes the activities of people traveling and staying in a place outside their usual environment for not more than 1 consecutive year regardless of the reason. You have said it right 
-Chammy
Good morning Chammy.
I really had a good time to talk about break even point this morning.
>>I really had a good time talking about the break-even point this morning.
I will practice the sentences that you taught me.
>>Correct
"Can you tell me the concept of tourism?"
When I got the question above, I was really in bad and serious tension.
>>Correct
I heard the word of concept many times but I wasn't able to clarify it.
>>I heard the word "concept" many times but I wasn't able to clarify it.
So I tried again.
>>Correct
Concept of tourism means kind of travel.
>> The concept of tourism means a kind of travel.
But there should be a condition to define it.
>>Correct
The point is travelers should leave home and enjoy seesight, having meals out side of their home.
>>The point is travelers should leave home to enjoy sightseeing, and having meals outside of their homes.
After that those travelers must go back to their house.
>>After that, those travelers must go back to their houses.
or
>>The travelers must then return to their homes.
If travelers don't come back to their home, it wouldn't be a tourism but for movement.
>>If travelers don't come back to their homes, it wouldn't be tourism but for movement.
or
>>If travelers do not return home, it is not considered tourism, but rather migration.
Even though I made the sentence shortly, I might be good answer I believe.
>>Even though I made the sentence short, it might be a good answer I believe.
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