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Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of using a food delivery service?


I think I tend to eat delivery food often, so I know well the pros and cons more than anyone.
First of all, the biggest advantage of the food delivery service is most food we can order.
If I want eat korean food , sushi or pasta we can order it even at dawn.
And If I feel lazy to cook, I use the delivery food app.
But, the downside is delivery food is expensive and the quality of the food is not good sometimes.
Because the characteristics of delivery foods to speed up delivery, chefs cook easy to cook food.
So, actually delivery food is not healthy food.
In addition, these days rising prices and also food prices are getting more expensive.
So, many people try to cook at home.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of using a food delivery service?



I think I tend to eat delivery food often, so I know well the pros and cons more than anyone.
>> CORRECT!
First of all, the biggest advantage of the food delivery service is most food we can order.
>> First of all, the biggest advantage of the food delivery service is that we can order most food.
If I want eat korean food , sushi or pasta we can order it even at dawn.
>> If I want eat Korean food, sushi, or pasta we can order it even at dawn.
And If I feel lazy to cook, I use the delivery food app.
>> CORRECT!
But, the downside is delivery food is expensive and the quality of the food is not good sometimes.
>> But, the downside is that delivery food is expensive, and the quality of the food is not good sometimes.
Because the characteristics of delivery foods to speed up delivery, chefs cook easy to cook food.
>> Because the characteristics of delivery food to speed up delivery, chefs cook easy-to-cook food.
So, actually delivery food is not healthy food.
>> So, actually, delivery food is not healthy at all.
In addition, these days rising prices and also food prices are getting more expensive.
>> In addition these days, prices increase, and also food prices are getting more expensive.
So, many people try to cook at home.
>> CORRECT!
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