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2023-11-28 2527

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Hello.
How was your day?
Today was the hell for me.
I saw many patients and did a lot of aesthetic procedures, nevertheless, today's income was not good, and it made me frustrated.
At lunch time, my wife came to me and we had a delicious food.
During the lunch time, I told her that my mother is so worried about my debt, and it was my mistake.
After leaving, My wife texted me that she felt so bad.
She asked me if she should reduce all expense for living with anger this afternoon.
She seemed to misunderstand about this situation.
I shouldn't have told her about my mother.
I think that there was always bad happenings after I told her about my mother.
My mother always is worried about everythings, especially about me.
Since I am her son, I can understand her, but my wife can't.
Anyway, I worked over one hour than decided today.
I am really exhausted, but I have to make up with my wife soon.
I will drink some wiskey tonight.
I am not sure I can attend tomorrow's class.
Anyway, see you.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Good evening, Dr. Kim!

Since I had some extra energy left, I decided to check and comment on your homework. Well, today was a fine one. I was a rainbow today so I bought lottery tickets. ^^ The money prize is around 3 million dollars. If I suddenly disappear, you know what happened. ^^

I am certain that you are exhausted today. Perhaps it started with our conversation this morning. Moreover, your revenue is not quite as expected. Sometimes when it rains, it really pours. This idiom inn English means that when one negative thing happens, it is a chain of unfortunate events. What is more is that your wife feels she needs to adjust to the financial condition you have right now. It became more complex and there are more people involved now like your mother.

Then, this time, you can realize the price of solitude and your own self time. As you pour on your whisky tonight, remember that some problems hardly disappear the next day but at least, this whisky can make you forget even just for a little while of the worries you have. Cheers!

As you can see, I have suggested some ways to revise some of the words  or phrases. Please go over them well. Well done on your composition today!

See you soon.

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

How was your day?
>> Correct!

Today was the hell for me.
>> Today was a hell for me.

I saw many patients and did a lot of aesthetic procedures, nevertheless, today's income was not good, and it made me frustrated.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

At lunch time, my wife came to me and we had a delicious food.
>>  Correct!

During the lunch time, I told her that my mother is so worried about my debt, and it was my mistake.
>> Correct!

After leaving, My wife texted me that she felt so bad.
>> Correct!
Or: After leaving, my wife texted me that she felt so bad.

She asked me if she should reduce all expense for living with anger this afternoon.
>> She asked me if she should reduce all expenses for living with anger this afternoon.

She seemed to misunderstand about this situation.
>> Correct!
Or: She seemed to misunderstand this situation.

I shouldn't have told her about my mother.
>> Correct!

I think that there was always bad happenings after I told her about my mother.
>> I think that there is always a bad happening after I told her about my mother.

My mother always is worried about everythings, especially about me.
>> My mother is always worried about everything, especially about me.

Since I am her son, I can understand her, but my wife can't.
>> Correct!

Anyway, I worked over one hour than decided today.
>> Anyway, I worked over one hour than usual today.

I am really exhausted, but I have to make up with my wife soon.
>>  I am really exhausted, but I have to make it up with my wife soon.

I will drink some wiskey tonight.
>> Correct!
Or: whisky

I am not sure I can attend tomorrow's class.
>> I am not sure if I can attend tomorrow's class.

Anyway, see you.
>> Correct!
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