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Connection between a person\'s lifestyle and the duration of his life

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What is the connection between a person's lifestyle and the duration of his life? I think it is case by case. Each person has his own thought. For example, staying home is good to someone, but some people doesn't like staying home. When it comes to going outside, it is same.

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Hi, Justin. Thank you so much for taking your time to do your homework. I appreciate it so much. Keep up the good work and see you in class! ^^
-T. Julia
I think it is case by case.
>> Correct
Each person has his own thought.
>> Each person has their own thoughts. 
For example, staying home is good to someone, but some people doesn't like staying home.
>> For example, staying home is good for some people, but others don't like staying home.
When it comes to going outside, it is same. 
>> When it comes to going outside, it is the same.
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