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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What things would you never let technology replace?

In the future, there will be many new jobs or disappear jobs become than now.
The reason is because of the development of technology.
These days, the talk of the about AI technology.
There are many people expect the many things will change because of the
development of computer technology.
The job that many people expect to survive is ironically need a lot of labor, for example jobs like a construction workers come to survive more other jobs.
Instead, they expect that jobs with a high value of money like a doctor,judge will be replace quickly.
Actually, I'm not sure what will happen in the future.
But, now days also too many jobs are still disappearing follow the development of technology.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What things would you never let technology replace?

In the future, there will be many new jobs or disappear jobs become than now.
>> In the future, there will be many new jobs or some jobs will soon disappear.
The reason is because of the development of technology.
>> CORRECT!
These days, the talk of the about AI technology.
>> These days, AI technology has been the talk of the town.
There are many people expect the many things will change because of the
development of computer technology.
>>  Many people expect that many things will change because of the development of computer technology.
The job that many people expect to survive is ironically need a lot of labor, for example jobs like a construction workers come to survive more other jobs.
>> The job that many people expect to survive ironically needs a lot of labor, for example jobs like construction come to survive more than other jobs.
Instead, they expect that jobs with a high value of money like a doctor,judge will be replace quickly.
>> Instead, they expect that jobs with a high value of money like doctors or judges will be replaced quickly.
Actually, I'm not sure what will happen in the future.
>> CORRECT!
But, now days also too many jobs are still disappearing follow the development of technology.
>> But, also nowadays, too many jobs are still disappearing following the development of technology.
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