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Homework_The importance of knowing the news.

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2023-11-27 1468

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First of all, I'm really sorry to not aswer your call.
These days, I was so busy preparing for my job interview of some companies I literally would like to work.
In today case, My mothere's friends came to my home. So there was really loud. And I was so sad to not answer your call. Haha..
I'm sure I will answer your call on time tomorow. I promise you.

Homework is.. about the importance of knowing the news... umm..
Well, These days, I think most people can check the news using their phone.
So It can become the topic we talk about something. For example when Covid19 appeared, everyone talked about that after checking the news about that.
So I think the importance of knowing and checking the news is one of some methods we can talk to someone.
It is really important to have a conversation with someone. So the news is important too!
This is just my opinion hehe..!

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Hello Leo!
Even though you were late that time. I am happy that you are able to do your composition. haha~ Let's hope positively that you will successfully get your first job! ^_^
In addition to your answer, the importance of knowing the news is to be informed about the happenings around you!~ :D
-Chammy
First of all, I'm really sorry to not aswer your call.
>>First of all, I'm really sorry for not answering your call.
These days, I was so busy preparing for my job interview of some companies I literally would like to work.
>>These days, I was so busy preparing for my job interview with some companies, I literally would like to work.
In today case, My mothere's friends came to my home. So there was really loud. And I was so sad to not answer your call. Haha.
>>In today's case, my mother's friends came to my home. So it was really loud. And I was so sad for not answering your call. Haha.
I'm sure I will answer your call on time tomorow. I promise you.
>>
I'm sure I will answer your call on time tomorrow. I promise you.
Homework is.. about the importance of knowing the news... umm..
Well, These days, I think most people can check the news using their phone.
>>Correct
So It can become the topic we talk about something. For example when Covid19 appeared, everyone talked about that after checking the news about that.
>> So it may become the topic of discussion. For example, when COVID-19 appeared, everyone talked about it after hearing about it in the news.
So I think the importance of knowing and checking the news is one of some methods we can talk to someone.
>>So I think the importance of knowing and checking the news is one of some methods we can talk to someone.
It is really important to have a conversation with someone. So the news is important too!
This is just my opinion hehe..
!
>>Correct
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