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I think that importance of university is getting become faint in this generation. At the past, it was important whether or not you graduated from university and what kind of university you graduated, especially when you try to get a job. But now, it is more matter how unique own skill you have in society.

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I think that importance of university is getting become faint in this generation. 
>> I think that the importance of university is becoming too much in this generation.

At the past, it was important whether or not you graduated from university and what kind of university you graduated, especially when you try to get a job. 
>> In the past, the degree that you earned and what school you got it from was not that important. 


But now, it is more matter how unique own skill you have in society.
>> But now, I believe what matters the most is the uniqueness of your skill and what it could offer in society. 
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