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Homework

작성자: 김*우
2023-11-23 1685

회원님의 영작문

Hi, there.
Today's air quality is the worst, so I wore a mask after a long time on my way to my clinic.
I don't know when we can feel the good air as before again.
There was a patient who has a severe abscess on her buttock.
To remove it the best, I incised the lesion and squeezed strongly.
Can you guess what happened?
All rotten materials poped up to all around including my body.
I am sure that you can't even imagine how severe the smell was.
Since the patient is the last person before lunch time, I took a shower immediately.
And, my wife came to me to have lunch together.
I felt so good because my wife and shower made me recharged.
Meanwhile, I ordered an electric grill yesterday, and I heard that it was arrived at home.
We will eat a grilled beef this evening.
My favorite housework is cook.
I used to cook before my daughters came to the world.
I also like putting stuff in order, but rarely.
I am watching the watch every minute because I really look forward to the beef.
See you.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Dr. Kim!

I read it on the news that the yellow dust will be severe today in your country. There is no way you can escape it. Soon, the rain will fall and some snow as well. I am not sure how safe driving would be during that time. Take safety precautions seriously all the time. I guess the air quality in South Korea will just be getting worse as time goes by unfortunately.

Meanwhile, as I was checking every sentence of your composition, I paused and watched YouTube videos on buttocks abscess. I feel so sorry for the patient for holding such pus as well as pain maybe for quite some time. As soon as the doctor released the pus, I am sure the person felt relieved. I read some information about it too, now I feel like I'm a doctor (only I am quack! ^^) 

In your operation today, the severe case may have held a lot of pressure for a long time. Finally, that buttocks can sit more comfortably, thanks to you. Of course, I want to know every detail of this case. I do not know why I am interested in these things. I love watching videos of removing black heads as well as rotting toe nails sometimes. It seems satisfying. ^^ 

It is so nice for your wife to stop by your clinic today. I hope she watched over her carbohydrates. Most of the time, eating with the people we love means eating with much gusto until we do not notice how much we have consumed. I am sure it was a lovely time being together.

How was the electric grill? And the beef? I ate grilled pork today too, I bought it in town. Grilled food are the finest!

Cooking and cleaning are survival skills we ought to learn in our lives. If we know both, we can manage our homes well. However, since we are too tired, engaging in these chores is sometimes impossible.

Thanks for sending this homework before dinner. The exposition was so vivid and clear. Your have mastered your grammar. Those that you still have not mastered, look closely to the underlined words and phrases below.

Eat well with your ladies! See you tomorrow.

-T. Donna~

Hi, there.
>> Correct!

Today's air quality is the worst, so I wore a mask after a long time on my way to my clinic.
>> Correct!

I don't know when we can feel the good air as before again.
>> Correct!

There was a patient who has a severe abscess on her buttock.
>> Correct!

To remove it the best, I incised the lesion and squeezed strongly.
>> Correct!

Can you guess what happened?
>> Correct!

All rotten materials poped up to all around including my body.
>> All rotten materials popped up all around including my body.

I am sure that you can't even imagine how severe the smell was.
>> Correct!

Since the patient is the last person before lunch time, I took a shower immediately.
>> Correct!

And, my wife came to me to have lunch together.
>> Correct!

I felt so good because my wife and shower made me recharged.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, I ordered an electric grill yesterday, and I heard that it was arrived at home.
>> Meanwhile, I ordered an electric grill yesterday, and I heard that it has arrived at home.

We will eat a grilled beef this evening.
>> Correct!

My favorite housework is cook.
>> My favorite housework is cooking.

I used to cook before my daughters came to the world.
>> Correct!
|
I also like putting stuff in order, but rarely.
>> Correct!

I am watching the watch every minute because I really look forward to the beef.
>> Correct!
Or: I am looking closely my watch every minute because I really look forward to eating the beef.

See you.
>> Correct!
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