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작성자: 김*우
2023-11-22 744

회원님의 영작문

Hello.
Today is more hectic.
I may have felt this way because I ate a lunch alone.
I always need an energy from my people.
I received the result of blood test, and I found that my HbA1c became normal but my wife's HbA1c got worse.
In addition, my wife's iron level got worse.
Since I am worried about my wife's health, I proposed her to take some nutritional supplement including iron, and she accepted it.
To lower her blood glucose, we better stop eating carbohydrate like bread, noodle, and snack.
How can we be happy without those food?
Regarding my homework, I have an experience that I was bullied.
When I was in middle school, many friends were jealous of me because I got high sores in all exams.
As a matter of fact, I was somewhat confident excessively, and it could be another reason.
One day, some of them who were my closest friends showed me the hostility, and it made me sad.
I am not sure I can say that this happening was being bullied.
Now I should get going to my wife.
See you.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good evening, Dr. Kim!

I know a man who is the happiest when your clinic is busy as a bee. His name is Dr. MJ. I am sure that he checked on everyone today especially the revenue. I am so happy for all of you and your achievements! 

It is unfortunate that your wife's HbA1c result got worse. Perhaps she may be stress eating when she is tired. They lack of iron means blood lacks adequate healthy red blood cells which may result to anemia. Taking supplements is indeed a good idea. Meanwhile life without carbohydrates means that you have to eat more vegetables and meat. I am sure you can all manage to do this. However, Korean sticky rice is just irresistible. 

Being bullied means having the intention of harming someone. If your classmates were ridiculing you before of being smart, that is considered bullying. It was not right. You see, some not so smart classmates think that you are the villain for getting good scores while they have low ones. Of course this is not your fault but they blame you because you score higher. Truly, the bullies have a crooked thought about the world and so they take it on someone.

Below, I made some minor grammar suggestions. Read them carefully. Thank you for writing an interesting and informative composition of your daily life and homework answer. It is much appreciated.

See you!

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

Today is more hectic.
>> Correct!

I may have felt this way because I ate a lunch alone.
>> I may have felt this way because I ate lunch alone. Very good expression!

I always need an energy from my people.
>> Correct!
Or: I always need energy from my people.

I received the result of blood test, and I found that my HbA1c became normal but my wife's HbA1c got worse.
>> I received the result of blood test, and I found out that my HbA1c became normal but my wife's HbA1c got worse.

In addition, my wife's iron level got worse.
>> Correct!

Since I am worried about my wife's health, I proposed her to take some nutritional supplement including iron, and she accepted it.
>> Since I am worried about my wife's health, I proposed to her to take some nutritional supplements including iron, and she accepted it.

To lower her blood glucose, we better stop eating carbohydrate like bread, noodle, and snack.
>> Correct!
Or: To lower her blood glucose, we better stop eating carbohydrates like bread, noodles, and snacks.

How can we be happy without those food?
>> Correct!

Regarding my homework, I have an experience that I was bullied.
>> Correct!

When I was in middle school, many friends were jealous of me because I got high sores in all exams.
>> Correct!

As a matter of fact, I was somewhat confident excessively, and it could be another reason.
>> Correct!

One day, some of them who were my closest friends showed me the hostility, and it made me sad.
>> Correct! Great sentence!

I am not sure I can say that this happening was being bullied.
>> I am not sure if I can say that this happening was being bullied.

Now I should get going to my wife.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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