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I was so glad that you can check my answers from questions which were in actual interview before.
And thank you for teaching the word "Master".
I am trying to get the certificate to master my field of expertise anyway.
Here's the sentences I wanted to be checked.

Q: Can you tell me good things about Korean culture?

In my opinion, good citizen awareness would be a good thing about Korean culture.
Nobody doesn't care other's items whose owner is out of the sight.
That's the why Korean can go to the restroom easily even if they leave their belongings on the public space. And also CCTVs are installed everywhere nearby.

Q: What is the outsourcing ?

It would be another department compared to own department of head office.
The managers from outsourcing are eligible for managing by themselves but not for head office owners.
And head office can get the fee from outsourcing department because they borrowed the space to outsourcing.

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Hello, Han!
I was expecting a long composition from you but when I opened your work, I was surprised it is just shorter than expected. hahaha... Your first answer to the first question was okay. However, the second one is something that I want to clarify. Maybe we can discuss it in our next class. ^_^ See you !~
-Chammy

I was so glad that you can check my answers from questions which were in actual interview before.
>>I was so glad that you could check my answers to questions that were in the actual interview.

And thank you for teaching the word "Master".
I am trying to get the certificate to master my field of expertise anyway.
>>Correct

Here's the sentences I wanted to be checked.
>> Here are the sentences I wanted to be checked.

Q: Can you tell me good things about Korean culture?
In my opinion, good citizen awareness would be a good thing about Korean culture.
>>Correct

Nobody doesn't care other's items whose owner is out of the sight.
That's the why Korean can go to the restroom easily even if they leave their belongings on the public space. And also CCTVs are installed everywhere nearby.
>>Nobody cares about other items whose owner is out of sight.
That's why Koreans can go to the restroom at ease even if they leave their belongings in the public space. Also, CCTVs are installed everywhere nearby.

Q: What is the outsourcing?
It would be another department compared to own department of head office.
>>It would be another department compared to the department of head office.
OR
>>We also call it a third party who performs certain tasks, handles operations or provides services for the company.

The managers from outsourcing are eligible for managing by themselves but not for head office owners.
>>The managers from outsourcing are eligible to manage for themselves but not for the head office owners.

And head office can get the fee from outsourcing department because they borrowed the space to outsourcing.
>>And head office can get the fee from the outsourcing department because they borrowed the space for outsourcing.

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