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I want to be one of 10people alive.
It is common people want to live forever.
Especially I want to speak English fluently before dying.
I haven¡¯t finished my goal.
I have a lot of things that I want to do.
Like reading books, dance and traveling.

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Hello, Ms. Sunny!
I agree with you,  a lot of people want to live longer. That is why, while we are still strong, try doing the things that you really want to do in life. 
Have a good morning!
Aki~


I want to be one of 10 people alive.
>>> CORRECT!

It is common people want to live forever.
>>> It is common for people to want to live forever.

Especially I want to speak English fluently before dying.
>>> I especially want to be fluent in English before dying.

I haven¡¯t finished my goal.
>>> I haven¡¯t finished my goal yet.

I have a lot of things that I want to do.
>>> CORRECT!

Like reading books, dance and traveling.
>>>  Like reading books, dancing, and traveling.
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