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2023-11-21 809

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Hello. T.Donna.
It was an amazing day.
There were too many clients and patients at the clinic.
As a result, it brought us a good profit.
In addition, there was no significant complaint.
Despite I am so exhausted, I am so happy for today's work.
Dr. MJ texted us many times as expected because he was so worried about the profit.
I don't know why he has a vacation.
I asked what he will do in his vacation, but he didn't replied at all.
He may have studied for investment or clinic management.
At lunch time, my wife came to me, so we could have a lunch together.
It made me recharged, so I could do my best at the clinic.
My wife and I got a blood test since the last checkup showed us some bad results.
I hope that the result is better this time.
Meanwhile, the cheapest thing in Korea is definate.
That is a cost of hospital.
These days, some bad people seem to look down on medical doctors because they consider a medical as a low value.
They don't know the gratitude of medical welfare.
See you.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello there, Dre. Kim!

I hope that you will have a fantastic day again today as yesterday. It seems like everything is falling to its right place. Your clinic is perfectly fine without Dr. MJ, your wife spends time with you to soothe and comfort you at work. What else can you ask for? Your life is in perfect balance right now. I hope that Dr. MJ will also feel this way as soon as he finishes his vacation.

Sometimes, worrying too much about today is not of good use. Worry can destroy about our confidence towards tomorrow. We just have to face each day head on. 

So, how was your blood check up? I hope everything is alright for the both of you.  

I think that being a doctor is still considered to be the best job in South Korea in spite of all the policies against doctors like you. They should value your contributions as key builders of health and beauty in your society.

I am grateful for this homework answer. Kindly study the underlined portions of my suggestions and master them well. Your writing always displays mastery of grammar, vocabulary, internationally accepted norms of standard English. Well done!

See you in class!

-T. Donna~

Hello. T.Donna.
>> Correct!

It was an amazing day.
>> Correct!

There were too many clients and patients at the clinic.
>> Correct!

As a result, it brought us a good profit.
>> Correct!

In addition, there was no significant complaint.
>> Correct!

Despite I am so exhausted, I am so happy for today's work.
>> Despite I being so exhausted, I am so happy for today's work.

Dr. MJ texted us many times as expected because he was so worried about the profit.
>> Correct!

I don't know why he has a vacation.
>> Correct!

I asked what he will do in his vacation, but he didn't replied at all.
>> I asked what he will do in his vacation, but he didn't reply at all.

He may have studied for investment or clinic management.
>> Correct!

At lunch time, my wife came to me, so we could have a lunch together.
>> Correct!

It made me recharged, so I could do my best at the clinic.
>> Correct!
Or: It made me recharged, so I could do my best in the clinic.

My wife and I got a blood test since the last checkup showed us some bad results.
>> Correct!

I hope that the result is better this time.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, the cheapest thing in Korea is definate.
>> Correct!
Or: definite

That is a cost of hospital.
>>That is the cost of hospital.

These days, some bad people seem to look down on medical doctors because they consider a medical as a low value.
>> These days, some bad people seem to look down on medical doctors because they consider healthcare as low value.
 
They don't know the gratitude of medical welfare.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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