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Which hobbies do you think are the most difficult?

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I don¡¯t know that many hobbies, but collecting rare things, such as stamps is one of the most difficult hobbies to the extent of my knowledge. As you know, writing a letter is not as popular as it used to be anymore. As I looked back on my military service, I used to look forward to letters from my beloved as well as then - my girlfriend. Hand-written letters showed more than the contents inside. I could understand the feelings of the writer and the situation when writing through handwriting. For instance, letters blurred by tears made me heartbroken, some scribbles on one side of the letter made me laugh. I could understand the writer's heart for me more profoundly in a handwritten letter. On top of that, the icing on the cake of letters for collectors was a stamp on the envelope. Stamps with various images and origins always caught peoples' eyes and caught on among collectors of rare things. But, nowadays, collecting stamps is getting more difficult because of their unpopularity.

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Hello Ateve! Great job on completing your homework! keep it up!
Sincerely, 
^^ T. Ara

I don¡¯t know that many hobbies, but collecting rare things, such as stamps is one of the most difficult hobbies to the extent of my knowledge. 
>>> I don¡¯t have many hobbies, but collecting rare items, such as stamps, is one of the most challenging pastimes, to the best of my knowledge.
As you know, writing a letter is not as popular as it used to be anymore. 
>>> As you know, writing letters is not as popular as it used to be.
As I looked back on my military service, I used to look forward to letters from my beloved as well as then - my girlfriend. 
>>> Reflecting on my military service, I used to eagerly await letters from my beloved, who was also my girlfriend at that time.
Hand-written letters showed more than the contents inside.
>>> Handwritten letters conveyed more than just their contents.
I could understand the feelings of the writer and the situation when writing through handwriting. 
>>> CORRECT!
For instance, letters blurred by tears made me heartbroken, some scribbles on one side of the letter made me laugh. 
>>> Tears that blurred letters broke my heart, while scribbles on the side of some letters made me laugh.
I could understand the writer's heart for me more profoundly in a handwritten letter. 
>>> I could understand the writer's feelings for me more profoundly in a handwritten letter.
On top of that, the icing on the cake of letters for collectors was a stamp on the envelope. 
>>> Furthermore, the cherry on top for collectors was a stamp on the envelope.
Stamps with various images and origins always caught peoples' eyes and caught on among collectors of rare things. 
>>> Stamps with various images and origins always caught people's eyes, gaining popularity among collectors of rare items.
But, nowadays, collecting stamps is getting more difficult because of their unpopularity.
>>> However, nowadays, collecting stamps is becoming more challenging due to their declining popularity.

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