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When I joined the marathon first time last year It was the hardest working out ever. It was summer and I have ran only 5 km. However I joined 10 km marathon. There were so many hills. I am not sure If I joined that marathon just now It would be easy.

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Hi, Thomas! 

Running needs some good training and technique to beat the time that you want to clock in. Of course, you want to be better than your last performance so you have to be on great condition physically and mentally as you run many kilometers.

Since I have never ran a marathon, I guess the degree of difficultly is tremendous and I might roll over the side of the street after just running a kilometer.

You have written a very good composition, keep it up! Study my suggestions below.

See you on Wednesday. 

-T. Donna~

When I joined the marathon first time last year It was the hardest working out ever. 
>> When I joined the marathon first time last year it was the hardest work out ever. 

It was summer and I have ran only 5 km. However I joined 10 km marathon. 
>> It was summer and I have ran only 5 kms. However, I joined the10 km marathon. 

There were so many hills. 
>> Correct!

I am not sure If I joined that marathon just now It would be easy.
>>  I am not sure if I joined that marathon now maybe it would be easier.
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