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Hi.
It was snowy for a while.
That was the first snow this year.
When the snow falls and stacks enough, I'll take the photo and send it to you.
Snow always makes my heart pumping.
Of course, I should worry about driving simultaneously.
Fortunately, it seems that snow is finished completely this time.
Today is our 11th wedding anniversary.
I prepared the bundle of flower this morning through the Coupang delivery.
What a convenient world!
My wife looked so happy because of flower.
Since we drank last night, we won't drink tonight.
Instead, we will consider the sumptuous food delivery this evening.
Although I didn't see many patient, the profit seems to be not bad.
Maybe, Dr. MJ worked so hard.
To celebrate our anniversary, I ordered pretty fishes which are supposed to live in my fish tank.
I am looking forward to receiving those fishes.
Regarding my homework, I really want my kids not to be a working students.
I think that students should focus on their learning for their better future.

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Hi there again, Dr. Kim!

What a lovely day! I also saw the snow fall in Seoul with my other student today! I wonder how high they stack on the ground for you to send me the photo when you can. I guess, unlike New York or Canada, yours is relatively less than these places. Nonetheless, snowfall is romantic and fascinating. I hope I can see some real snowfall soon. Then, pay careful attention on the road while driving and expect for more snow to fall soon.

Happy anniversary to you and your wife! Receiving a bunch of flowers in the morning is one of the best things that you can do for a starter. I am sure your wife was all smiles like she is in cloud nine. It is not everyday that she gets flowers and this day is extra special. Thanks to your effort and the help of Coupang!

As you have some hearty meal tonight, you can reckon on the love that you started 11 years ago even when you did not have kids yet. Celebrating your anniversary can make you look back on fond memories and remind each other how far you have come from the day you first met.

In your clinic meanwhile, let Dr. MJ do his thing. ^^ Everything is going to be alright. 

Finally, if you will retire early, your kids may need to work since they are three and there needs to be more financial support for all of them. I am sure you have these covered.

Now, please read my suggestions carefully. Your homework answer and composition gets better and better over time. Hence, well done once again!

See you next week!

-T. Donna~

Hi.
>> Correct!

It was snowy for a while.
>> Correct!

That was the first snow this year.
>> Correct!

When the snow falls and stacks enough, I'll take the photo and send it to you.
>> Correct!

Snow always makes my heart pumping.
>> Correct!

Of course, I should worry about driving simultaneously.
>> Correct!
Or: 
Of course, I should worry about driving and snowing simultaneously.

Fortunately, it seems that snow is finished completely this time.
>>  Fortunately, it seems that the snow is finished completely by this time.

Today is our 11th wedding anniversary.
>> Correct!

I prepared the bundle of flower this morning through the Coupang delivery.
>> I prepared a bundle of flowers this morning through the Coupang delivery.

What a convenient world!
>> Correct!

My wife looked so happy because of flower.
>>My wife looked so happy because of the flower.

Since we drank last night, we won't drink tonight.
>> Correct!

Instead, we will consider the sumptuous food delivery this evening.
>> Correct!

Although I didn't see many patient, the profit seems to be not bad.
>> Although I didn't see many patients, the profit seems not to be bad.

Maybe, Dr. MJ worked so hard.
>> Correct!

To celebrate our anniversary, I ordered pretty fishes which are supposed to live in my fish tank.
>> Correct!

I am looking forward to receiving those fishes.
>> Correct!

Regarding my homework, I really want my kids not to be a working students.
>> Regarding my homework, I don't really want my kids  to be working students.

I think that students should focus on their learning for their better future.
>> Correct!

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