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Hi, T.Donna.
It was an another peaceful day.
However, there happened several administrative work as the closing time came.
Hence, I worked one hour more than decided.
Meanwhile, as soon as I arrived at home, I could feel cold atmosphere.
After a while, I could hear about the happening.
There happened something between my wife and Irene.
Irene yelled at Megan about something.
I have no idea in detail, but I heard that it was not a big deal.
Thus, my wife tried to stop Irene silently.
Since Irene kept yelling at sister, my wife couldn't stand it anymore, so she scolded Irene too much.
Consequently, all of my family became unhappy.
I had known that Irene regretted her behavior, so I advised her to apologize her mother and sister continuously.
With her apology, my family got back a peace fortunately.
There are so many restaurants in our city.
Some of them have a special dish, but nothing comes to my mind right now.
Everytime I eat a special food, I'll let you know about it.
See you.

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Hello there, Dr. Kim!

It was unfortunate that a heated argument between Irene and Megan happened in your home yesterday. Sometimes, girls really fight and when they do, it is via words. In this case, since Irene was older, her mother advised her to be kinder to her little sister. More often than not, even if Irene were right, she needs to apologize to her younger sister because it is the best way when she is the older one.

One day, Megan will realize this too as she grows older with her younger cousin. I wonder what Rachel was doing this time... Maybe, mediating. Anyway, all is well that ends well. Since apologies were said, peace is back and everyone hopes that there will be no yelling or arguments for the meantime.

Meanwhile, as Irene grows to be a woman, she will learn to be kinder and more forgiving to her sisters. I have many sisters and I remember the days when we just did not verbally fight but physically too and I thought it was so silly today! ^^

I hope that your workload today is manageable. As the cold weather seeps in your country, we wish that people will flock by your clinic. And if they do not, there is always a good restaurant nearby to visit with Dr. MJ.

Thank you for the detailed writing of your family issue as well as the homework answer. It was presented in an organized manner as well as correct grammatical structures. Excellent job!

See you again next week!

-T. Donna~

Hi, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

It was an another peaceful day.
>> It was another peaceful day.

However, there happened several administrative work as the closing time came.
>> Correct!

Hence, I worked one hour more than decided.
>> Hence, I worked one hour more.

Meanwhile, as soon as I arrived at home, I could feel cold atmosphere.
>>  Meanwhile, as soon as I arrived at home, I could feel a cold atmosphere.

After a while, I could hear about the happening.
>> Correct!
Or: After a while, I heard about what happened.

There happened something between my wife and Irene.
>> Correct!
Or: There was something between my wife and Irene.

Irene yelled at Megan about something.
>> Correct!

I have no idea in detail, but I heard that it was not a big deal.
>> Correct!

Thus, my wife tried to stop Irene silently.
>> Correct!

Since Irene kept yelling at sister, my wife couldn't stand it anymore, so she scolded Irene too much.
>> Since Irene kept yelling at her sister, my wife couldn't stand it anymore, so she scolded Irene too much.

Consequently, all of my family became unhappy.
>> Correct!
Or: 
Consequently, all of my family members became unhappy.

I had known that Irene regretted her behavior, so I advised her to apologize her mother and sister continuously.
>> I had known that Irene regretted her behavior, so I advised her to apologize to her mother and sister continuously.

With her apology, my family got back a peace fortunately.
>> With her apology, my family got back peace fortunately.

There are so many restaurants in our city.
>> Correct!

Some of them have a special dish, but nothing comes to my mind right now.
>> Correct!

Everytime I eat a special food, I'll let you know about it.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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