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What do you like most about your bedroom? Answer in no more than five (5) sentences.

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When I sleep, body pillows are the most important things. I always sleep with them on both my arms. They make me feel cozy.
And I have no TV in my room, so I use IPAD. When I watch it, Ipad stand. I can watch drama with lying down in my bed.

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When I sleep, body pillows are the most important things.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: Body pillows are the most crucial items to me when I sleep.
I always sleep with them on both my arms. They make me feel cozy.
>>> CORRECT
>>> OR: They are usually on both of my arms as I sleep. They make me feel at ease.
And I have no TV in my room, so I use IPAD. 
>>> I have no TV in my room, so I use my iPAD.
When I watch it, Ipad stand. I can watch drama with lying down in my bed.
>>> When I watch it, I use an iPAD stand. I can watch dramas while lying down in bed.
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