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Share a thing that never fails to make you smile.

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It's quite simple to make me smile.
The first thing I do when I'm in a bad mood is to listen to dance music with fast beats.
For example, music such as 'Permission to dance' in BTS.
Rhythm while listening to music quickly makes you feel better.
The second thing is to go eating delicious food.
Among many foods, meat would be the best food to make me smile.
Ice americano and sweet chocolate cake or tiramisu for dessert?
The last thing is to take a picture.
While taking pictures of beautiful scenery, I can laugh on my own, and happiest smile comes when I go to good place with my family and take pictures.

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Good morning, Yun. I really enjoyed reading about what makes you smile! Your simple pleasures, like listening to upbeat music and enjoying good food, show how you appreciate life's little joys. The part about taking pictures with your family is especially heartwarming. It's evident that you find happiness in the moments that matter most. You are blessed, Yun. I'm happy or you. Thanks for this! See you in our class. ¢¾
~T. Jade^^
Homework: Share a thing that never fails to make you smile.
It's quite simple to make me smile.
>> Correct
The first thing I do when I'm in a bad mood is to listen to dance music with fast beats.
>> Correct
For example, music such as 'Permission to dance' in BTS.
>> For example, music such as 'Permission to Dance' by BTS.
Rhythm while listening to music quickly makes you feel better.
>> The rhythm while listening to music quickly makes you feel better.
The second thing is to go eating delicious food.
>> The second thing is to go eat delicious food.
Among many foods, meat would be the best food to make me smile.
>> Correct
Ice americano and sweet chocolate cake or tiramisu for dessert?
>> Correct
The last thing is to take a picture.
>> Correct
>> OR: The last thing is to take pictures.
While taking pictures of beautiful scenery, I can laugh on my own, and happiest smile comes when I go to good place with my family and take pictures.
>> While taking pictures of beautiful scenery, I can laugh on my own, and my happiest smile comes when I go to a good place with my family and take pictures.
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