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Hello, T.Donna.
Fortunately, my headache was gone right after I took a tyrenol.
This morning, I took my kids to their school as usual, and then I visited Starbucks, which I bought two coffees, soups, and bagels.
My wife and I enjoyed a tea time, and then we went to a sushi restaurant.
There were not others at that time, so we enjoyed eating and talking freely.
Do you know Sushi omakase?
In omakase, we usually sit a table that surround the chef, and the chef makes delicious food immediately and we can watch the process of making.
Hence, omakase can make our tongue and eyes joyful.
Anyway we were satisfied with the food completely.
After the lunch, I took a nap, and then I attended guitar class.
Since I don't have any day off next weak(because of Dr.MJ's vacation), I tried to learn harder today.
Right after that, I did workout with my friend as before.
I ate a Jok-bal for dinner with my family.
Do you know Jok-bal?
And, I played a nintendo game as I planned.
I feel drained now.
See you.

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Hi there, Dr. Kim!

I am glad that you solved your headache quickly. It is difficult to go by the day with some physical pain.

Nevertheless, it is so good to know about your itinerary and how you enjoyed executing each activity with delight and gusto. The omakase experience was one of a kind. The funny thing that you mentioned in class was the chef's remark on some parasites. ^^ I hope that was the last time you ever had to experience that comment from a chef. It seems that you devoured the serving after all. I am jealous that you eat very sumptuous all the time. However, the holidays are here in the Philippines, so, delicious food will abound again at home, weddings, and events. I got to run!

It is my first time to know that you took a nap. This is truly relaxing and you ought to have more of this during your day off to reset your senses and replenish your mind. It is sad that next week, you have to work for many straight days but it is the best thing to do.

Finally, having a hearty time with your daughters is priceless. I admire your for spending quality time with them.

Thus, kindly go over my grammar suggestions below.  You have written combinations of sentences and I am happy to see you explore patterns, vocabulary, and idioms. Keep up the excellent work always!

See you again!

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

Fortunately, my headache was gone right after I took a tyrenol.
>> Correct!
Or: Tylenol

This morning, I took my kids to their school as usual, and then I visited Starbucks, which I bought two coffees, soups, and bagels.
>> This morning, I took my kids to their school as usual, and then I visited Starbucks, where I bought two cups of coffee, soup, and bagels.

My wife and I enjoyed a tea time, and then we went to a sushi restaurant.
>> Correct!

There were not others at that time, so we enjoyed eating and talking freely.
>> There were no others at that time, so we enjoyed eating and talking freely.

Do you know Sushi omakase?
>> Correct!

In omakase, we usually sit a table that surround the chef, and the chef makes delicious food immediately and we can watch the process of making.
>> In omakase, we usually sit around the table that surrounds the chef, and the chef makes delicious food immediately and we can watch the process of making food.

Hence, omakase can make our tongue and eyes joyful.
>> Correct!

Anyway we were satisfied with the food completely.
>> Correct!

After the lunch, I took a nap, and then I attended guitar class.
>>After lunch, I took a nap, and then I attended my guitar class.

Since I don't have any day off next weak(because of Dr.MJ's vacation), I tried to learn harder today.
>> Correct!
Or: next week

Right after that, I did workout with my friend as before.
>> Right after that, I did a workout with my friend as before.

I ate a Jok-bal for dinner with my family.
>> I ate Jok-bal for dinner with my family.

Do you know Jok-bal?
>> Correct!

And, I played a nintendo game as I planned.
>> Correct!
Or: Nintendo

I feel drained now.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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