¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

homework 11.14

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÃÖ*Ç
2023-11-14 2186

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Can snow be dangerous?

When it snows, I feel that start the real winter season.
But, if it snows too much, there are many dangerous things.
I think the first of them is a green(plastic) house.
Many farmers using greenhouses to grow the fruits and the vegetables in winter.
However, if there are stack too much snow, the snow will destroy the greenhouse.
Similarly, the weak roofs houses can collapse because snow.
Next, the road freezes.
If we don\'t remove the snow on the road, the road becomes icy like an ice skating rink.
So many car can't move, or many people slip and get hurt.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Can snow be dangerous?


When it snows, I feel that start the real winter season.
>> When it snows, I feel that it's already the start of the real winter season.
But, if it snows too much, there are many dangerous things.
>> CORRECT!
I think the first of them is a green(plastic) house.
>> I think the first of them is the green (plastic) house.
Many farmers using greenhouses to grow the fruits and the vegetables in winter.
>> Many farmers use greenhouses to grow the fruits and the vegetables in winter.
However, if there are stack too much snow, the snow will destroy the greenhouse.
>> However, if there is a big stack of snow, the snow will destroy the greenhouse.
Similarly, the weak roofs houses can collapse because snow.
>> Similarly, the weak houses' roofs can collapse because of the snow.
Next, the road freezes.
>> Next are the frozen roads.
If we don\'t remove the snow on the road, the road becomes icy like an ice skating rink.
>> If we don't remove the snow on the road, the road becomes icy like an ice skating rink.
So many car can't move, or many people slip and get hurt.
>> So many cars can't move, or many people slip and get hurt.

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
134526 Homework ±è*¼÷ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 1426
134525 a bad day ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 0
134524 Do you think festivals are important for counties? ÃÖ*¼ø ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 1321
134523 Homework Ȳ*Çý ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 1198
134522 Diary ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 1
134521 What do you think is the worst kind of crime? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 971
134520 my weekends ±è*¾Æ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 1162
134519 Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 1398
134518 Homework À±*¼± ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 1347
134517 Homework ±è* ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 1108
134516 Would you like to travel to other countries alone somday? ¹Ú*Çö ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 1429
134515 Homework ±è* ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 796
134514 Homework ±Ç*À± ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 4
134513 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 241
134512 Different thought °í*È£ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 1633
134511 WRITING TASK: What was the most memorable concert you have been... ÀÓ*Áö ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 9
134510 At what age does a child become an adult ¹Ú*À² ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 1699
134509 Describe your favorite place in detail. ÃÖ*ÈÆ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 1569
134508 If you could change one thing about your current house ot make... ¹Ú*È£ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 1294
134507 qweqweq Te*002 ¿Ï·á 2024-02-06 5

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04