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If you could stop time, what would you do and why?

작성자: 김*경
2023-11-10 2846

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It is very appalling question to stimulate my imagination. If I could stop time and run any vehicle to move to where I want. I would travel around the world, especially the place being used exclusively, such as President’s offices of major advanced countries including America, and Japan. Furthermore, I wouldn't restart time which had once stopped because getting old is the last thing that almost every person want. However, because I have people to talk and interact with, I would resort to restarting time. One more crazy idea about what I want to do when all things stop is to go to VIP office to get the most profitable information. With the confidential information, I can get enormous money by investment.

Anyway, this outrageous imagination could be good to kill the time, but doesn’t seem to do me good in my real life. Getting back to normal life, I keep it mind that doing my best in my real life than hoping for fluke is the fastest way for me to be happy.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Steve!
Thank you for responding to your homework! Well done! Keep up the good work. It's great that you always think outside the box and ensure that your answers have substance. Well Done!
Sincerely, 
^^ T. Ara

It is very appalling question to stimulate my imagination. 
>>>It is a very stimulating question to provoke my imagination.
If I could stop time and run any vehicle to move to where I want. 
>>> If I could stop time and run any vehicle to move to where I want,
I would travel around the world, especially the place being used exclusively, such as President’s offices of major advanced countries including America, and Japan.
>>> I would travel around the world, especially places being used exclusively, such as the President’s offices of major advanced countries, including America and Japan.
Furthermore, I wouldn't restart time which had once stopped because getting old is the last thing that almost every person want. 
>>> Furthermore, I wouldn't restart time once it had stopped because getting old is the last thing that almost every person wants.
However, because I have people to talk and interact with, I would resort to restarting time. 
>>> CORRECT!
One more crazy idea about what I want to do when all things stop is to go to VIP office to get the most profitable information. 
>>> CORRECT!
With the confidential information, I can get enormous money by investment.
>>> CORRECT!
Anyway, this outrageous imagination could be good to kill the time, but doesn’t seem to do me good in my real life.
>>> Anyway, this outrageous imagination could be good to kill time but doesn’t seem to do me any good in my real life.
Getting back to normal life, I keep it mind that doing my best in my real life than hoping for fluke is the fastest way for me to be happy.
>>> Getting back to normal life, I keep in mind that doing my best in my real life is the fastest way for me to be happy, rather than hoping for luck.


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