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What jobs in your country are considered to be good jobs? Why?

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First, public employees are very popular among job seekers here. As the instability of job security is getting rampant across the board, a large amount of job seekers have been surging into the government officials¡¯ job openings. And this outrageous happening may be attributed to the inclination of young generation for a balance between job and life.
Second, medical workers get much attention from students considering their majors in college. Medical workers, such as doctors, vets, and nurses are considered to be high-salary and secure professions for them.
Lastly, historically, we Koreans have been influenced by Confucianism values which place greater importance on studying scriptures than technology and engineering. I am afraid that Koreans still despise the engineers working in the field.
I am concerned about this strange trend in which only some occupations are on the front burner because society needs various jobs to develop across the board.

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Great job on completing your homework. You've given a very thorough and commendable answer. Keep up the good work!
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First, public employees are very popular among job seekers here. 
>>> CORRECT!
As the instability of job security is getting rampant across the board, a large amount of job seekers have been surging into the government officials¡¯ job openings. 
>>> CORRECT!
And this outrageous happening may be attributed to the inclination of young generation for a balance between job and life.
>>> And this happening may be attributed to the inclination of the young generation for a balance between job and life.
Second, medical workers get much attention from students considering their majors in college. 
>>> CORRECT!
Medical workers, such as doctors, vets, and nurses are considered to be high-salary and secure professions for them.
>>> CORRECT!
Lastly, historically, we Koreans have been influenced by Confucianism values which place greater importance on studying scriptures than technology and engineering. 
>>> CORRECT!
OR>>> Lastly, historically, Koreans have been influenced by Confucian values that prioritize studying scriptures over technology and engineering.
I am afraid that Koreans still despise the engineers working in the field.
>>> CORRECT!
I am concerned about this strange trend in which only some occupations are on the front burner because society needs various jobs to develop across the board.
>>> I am concerned about this trend in which only some occupations are on the front burner because society needs various jobs to develop across the board.
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