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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think is the most dangerous animal?

There are many dangerous animals in the world, like a lions, wolves, and sharks, but luckily is not find in the city.
But, we can find common and dangerous animals in our town.
We can easily find animals such as bird and wild cats on the streets.
And there are even wild dogs outside the city.
Among them I think wild dogs and wild cats are dangerous.
It's because is that animals can suddenly attack people.
In addition, in rare cases, we may get rabies disease.
So if I find wild animals, I just watch from afar.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you think is the most dangerous animal?


There are many dangerous animals in the world, like a lions, wolves, and sharks, but luckily is not find in the city.
>> There are many dangerous animals in the world, like lions, wolves, and sharks, but luckily it is not possible to find them in the city.
But, we can find common and dangerous animals in our town.
>> CORRECT!
We can easily find animals such as bird and wild cats on the streets.
>> We can easily find animals such as birds and wild cats on the streets.
And there are even wild dogs outside the city.
>> CORRECT!
Among them I think wild dogs and wild cats are dangerous.
>> CORRECT!
It's because is that animals can suddenly attack people.
>> It's because those animals can suddenly attack people.
In addition, in rare cases, we may get rabies disease.
>> In addition, in rare cases, we may get rabies.
So if I find wild animals, I just watch from afar.
>> CORRECT!

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