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Good morning, Yun. These are wonderful destinations. I hope you get the opportunity to visit them and create amazing travel memories! Aim for it. ^_^ Thanks for this. See you tomorrow. ¢¾
~T. Jade^^

Homework: How do you choose where to go? Are you inspired by other people's travel stories? Or photos? Or advertising?

I don't know because I chose it in many ways, but I want to tell you how I chose ways a lot.
>> I don't know because I chose it in many ways, but I want to tell you how I chose a lot of ways.
>> OR: I'm not sure because I've chosen in various ways, but I'd like to share the numerous methods I've used to make my choices.

First, we go to a familiar place.

>> Correct

If we are in Korea, we will go to a place where there are many familiar and delicious foods, and if we are overseas, we will go to a country or city with a familiar name.

>> Correct

I decided to go to Seoul with my family next weekends because my younger brother in the dormitory is nearby.

>> I decided to go to Seoul with my family next weekend because my younger brother lives in the dormitory nearby.

Even before that, we often have met in Seoul in consideration of my younger brother.

>> Even before that, we often met in Seoul in consideration of my younger brother.
>> OR: Even before that, we often met in Seoul with the thought of being close to my younger brother.

And most of them often leave inspired by other people's travel stories.

>> Correct
>> OR: And most of us are often inspired by other people's travel stories.

Search the Internet or search for travel reviews left on blogs and decide.

>> Correct
>> OR: Search the internet or look for travel reviews on blogs to make a decision.

These days, I decide where to go after watching TV programs or pictures that impressing in my mind.

>> Correct
>> OR: These days, I decide where to go after watching TV programs or pictures that leave a strong impression in my mind.

Iceland and Turkey are the places I really want to visit there.

>> Correct

The reason I want to go to Iceland is that Korea TV travel entertainment programs and wonderful aurora photos caught my heart, and the reason I want to go to Turkey is that saw a lot of pretty hot air ballons pictures.

>> The reason I want to go to Iceland is that Korea TV travel entertainment programs and wonderful aurora photos caught my heart, and the reason I want to go to Turkey is that I saw a lot of pretty hot air balloon pictures.
>> OR: The reason I want to go to Iceland is that Korean TV travel entertainment programs and wonderful aurora photos have captured my heart, and the reason I want to go to Turkey is that I've seen a lot of pretty hot air balloon pictures.

I don't know when it will be, but I really want to go to these two countries.

>> Correct

Homework uploads file.

>> I have uploaded the homework file.

File check, please.

>> Correct
>> OR: Please check it.
Have nice day!

>> Have a nice day!

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