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2023-11-08 2038

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Hi.
How was your flu?
I am sure you are a high profit person in your country, nevertheless, it is not easy for you to see a doctor.
Korea is a blessing country regarding the medical approach.
I hope that your country can have this system soon.
In spite of my day off, today was so hectic.
After our class, I took my kids to their school, and then visited a STARBUGS nearby to buy two coffees for my wife and me.
We had a tea time for a while, and then I met my friend to workout together.
After exercise and sauna, we had a lunch "King don-kat-su". (Maybe you saw this food in the drama "moving".
And, I visited my kids' school, where I watched a small concert of ukulele that students including Irene played.
And, I attended my guitar class and visited a tire shop to replace my tires and visited a shoes shop to buy a new running shoes because old one was broken.
Lastly, my family and I went to a noodle restaurant to have a dinner.
I should play a Nintendo with my kids and my wife soon.
See you.

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Hi there, Dr. Kim!!

My flu was worse today yet, I had a meeting so I went to the golf club and met my clients for a wedding next year. As I was walking, I had some difficulty breathing so I had to adjust my pacing. Perhaps, going to the doctor is not actually my problem but my lack of time to go there due to my schedule. I hope to feel better when I see you in class.

Meanwhile, indeed, your schedule is like a program. It has parts and all of them seem to be a highlight. It was well-balanced and everyone important in your life is involved. I commend you for fractioning your time accordingly to your wife, children, and friend. You are living the life every Wednesday.

How are your new tires? And your new shoes? New things, new beginnings. I hope that your tires keep you safe and the Puma shoes bring you good health.

You must be so proud of Irene! She's got your musical genes.

Since I never played any computer game, I would like to try Nintendo Switch with my son and nephew next time.

I appreciate your time, talent, and excellent work in writing down your journal always. Please go over the grammar pointers.

See you soon!

-T. Donna~

Hi.
>> Correct!

How was your flu?
>> Correct!

I am sure you are a high profit person in your country, nevertheless, it is not easy for you to see a doctor.
>> Correct!

Korea is a blessing country regarding the medical approach.
>> Correct!

I hope that your country can have this system soon.
>> Correct!

In spite of my day off, today was so hectic.
>> Correct!

After our class, I took my kids to their school, and then visited a STARBUGS nearby to buy two coffees for my wife and me.
>> After our class, I took my kids to their school, and then visited a STARBUCKS nearby to buy two cups of coffee for my wife and me.

We had a tea time for a while, and then I met my friend to workout together.
>> Correct!

After exercise and sauna, we had a lunch "King don-kat-su". (Maybe you saw this food in the drama "moving".
>> Correct!
Or: After exercise and sauna, we had "King don-kat-su" for lunch . (Maybe you saw this food in the drama "Moving".

And, I visited my kids' school, where I watched a small concert of ukulele that students including Irene played.
>> And, I visited my kids' school, where I watched a small concert of playing the ukulele of students including Irene.

And, I attended my guitar class and visited a tire shop to replace my tires and visited a shoes shop to buy a new running shoes because old one was broken.
>> And, I attended my guitar class and visited a tire shop to replace my tires and visited a shoes shop to buy a new running shoes because the old one was broken.

Lastly, my family and I went to a noodle restaurant to have a dinner.
>> Correct!
Or: Lastly, my family and I went to a noodle restaurant to have dinner.

I should play a Nintendo with my kids and my wife soon.
>> I should play Nintendo with my kids and my wife soon.

See you.
>> Correct!
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