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2023-11-06 1255

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Hello.
How was your day?
Were you busy all day like weekend?
I was somewhat busy, but it was okay.
Actually, my wife and I are into the drama "Moving" these days.
We were done watching the chapter 18.
Since there are 20 chapters, it remains only two chapters.
A few days ago, we started watching the drama, and it was so interesting.
I know that you are interested in many videos of Korea Broadcasting, so I guess you know the drama "Moving".
It is about superpower people in Korea.
Comparing Marvel movie, Heros of this drama seem to be more familiar to us because they are trying to live an ordinary lives.
Anyway, watching this drama at night made me more fatigued.
Maybe, I may watch the chapter 19 after this composition.
There are too many reservation at the clinic tomorrow because of my previous vacation.
Thus I should go to sleep early, but I am not sure I can do that.
Regarding my homework, there are many new clients who aren't satisfied with other clinic's pigment treatment.
See you.

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Hello, Dr. Kim!

You guessed it right! I had a long day yesterday and so did you. A few hours ago, I was as cold as ice and down with the flu. Right now, I feel better with the help of a flu drug. ^^

Moving is the best drama for the whole family (except for the bloody scenes and brutal fighting) because it has the complete elements of characters of the kids, teenagers, and parents. Not only this, the characters were perfectly curated  to justify the relevance of every hero and supporting roles.

Then, were you satisfied with the ending? How about the entire story? Who played the best and the worst characters? In a highly acclaimed drama such as Moving, the elements of characters, budget, timing, and public appeal combine to the success of the entire story. 

I guess, Kang Full got tired of his leftist predicaments and decided to create heroes this time to save South Korea to the evil forces up North. 

So, how' your clinic today? I am sure that you will perform all your task excellently in spite of some lack of sleep.

I am grateful for the consistency in your grammar and vocabulary growth. Let us work hard to make complex and longer sentences with the use of transitions words. Overall, excellent job!

See you soon.

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

How was your day?
>> Correct!

Were you busy all day like weekend?
>> Were you busy all day like the weekend?

I was somewhat busy, but it was okay.
>> Correct!

Actually, my wife and I are into the drama "Moving" these days.
>> Correct!

We were done watching the chapter 18.
>> Correct!
Or: We were done watching Chapter 18.

Since there are 20 chapters, it remains only two chapters.
>> Correct!
Or: Since there are 20 episodes, there remains only two episodes.

A few days ago, we started watching the drama, and it was so interesting.
>> Correct!

I know that you are interested in many videos of Korea Broadcasting, so I guess you know the drama "Moving".
>> Correct!

It is about superpower people in Korea.
>> It is about people with superpower in Korea.

Comparing Marvel movie, Heros of this drama seem to be more familiar to us because they are trying to live an ordinary lives.
>> Comparing to Marvel movie, the heroes of this drama seem to be more familiar to us because they are trying to live ordinary lives.

Anyway, watching this drama at night made me more fatigued.
>> Correct!

Maybe, I may watch the chapter 19 after this composition.
>> Correct!
Or: Maybe, I may watch (chapter/episode) 19 after this composition.

There are too many reservation at the clinic tomorrow because of my previous vacation.
>> There are too many reservations (at/ in) the clinic tomorrow because of my previous vacation.

Thus I should go to sleep early, but I am not sure I can do that.
>> Correct!
Or: Thus, I should go to sleep early, but I am not sure I can do that.

Regarding my homework, there are many new clients who aren't satisfied with other clinic's pigment treatment.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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