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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you buy presents in advance or are you a last-minute shopper?

I think, I'm last-minute shopper.
In my case, I tend to buy gift when my friend and family's birthday or anniversary are leave a few days.
One of the reason is my country's exchange or refund system.
Many people worry when they give presents to their friend.
If my friend dissatisfied my present, we think of a refund or exchange.
In our country, exchanges and refunds have to until in 7 days after buy the product.
So, in my case, when I choice a gift, I considering the refund date.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you buy presents in advance or are you a last-minute shopper?


I think, I'm last-minute shopper.
>> I think I'm a last-minute shopper.
In my case, I tend to buy gift when my friend and family's birthday or anniversary are leave a few days.
>> In my case, I tend to buy gifts when my friends and family members' birthday or anniversaries are just around the corner.
One of the reason is my country's exchange or refund system.
>> One of the reasons is my country's exchange or refund system.
Many people worry when they give presents to their friend.
>> CORRECT!
If my friend dissatisfied my present, we think of a refund or exchange.
>> If my friend is dissatisfied with my present, we think about a refund or exchange.
In our country, exchanges and refunds have to until in 7 days after buy the product.
>> In our country, exchanges and refunds have to be within 7 days after buying the product.
So, in my case, when I choice a gift, I considering the refund date.
>> So, in my case, when I choose a gift, I consider the refund date.

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