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Do you think money can buy happiness, or do you believe in the saying, \"Money can\'t buy happiness\

작성자: 이*윤
2023-11-04 2114

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I believe in the saying that "Money can't buy happiness."
Because I've already seen and heard a lot of examples.
For example, do you think the person who wins the lotto will be happy?
Of course, you can feel good when you receive the first place money.
But, he or she is already beginning his or her misfortune.
He or she has to constantly suffer from robbery and can be cheated by his or her friends or wasted his or her property. Even they are cheated by his or her family. Furthermore, the married couple do as showcase couple or divorced.
It may be the worst example of many, but we know it. That all of them are true.
So most people say. "Money can't buy happiness and love. So, you can enjoy happiness for a while with money, but you can't enjoy happiness forever."

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Yun. I really appreciate your honest and thoughtful perspective on money and happiness. Your personal examples and clear expression of your beliefs make your response genuine and relatable. Keep sharing your insights – it's wonderful to hear your perspective! Thanks for this. Yun. See you in our class tomorrow!
~T. Jade^^
Homework: Do you think money can buy happiness, or do you believe in the saying,"Money can't buy happiness?"
I believe in the saying that "Money can't buy happiness."
>> Correct
Because I've already seen and heard a lot of examples.
>> Correct
For example, do you think the person who wins the lotto will be happy?
>> Correct
Of course, you can feel good when you receive the first place money.
>> Of course, you can feel good when you receive the first-place prize money.
But, he or she is already beginning his or her misfortune.
>> But, he or she may already be beginning to experience misfortune.
He or she has to constantly suffer from robbery and can be cheated by his or her friends or wasted his or her property. 
>> He or she has to constantly suffer from robbery and can be cheated by his or her friends or waste his or her property.
>> OR: They have to constantly worry about theft, be susceptible to cheating by friends, and may squander their wealth.
Even they are cheated by his or her family. 
>> They might even be cheated by their own family members.
Furthermore, the married couple do as showcase couple or divorced.
>> Furthermore, the married couple either acts as a showcase couple or gets divorced.
It may be the worst example of many, but we know it. 
>> Correct
>> OR: It may be one of the worst examples, but we are aware of it.
That all of them are true.
>> All of these scenarios are true.
So most people say. "Money can't buy happiness and love. So, you can enjoy happiness for a while with money, but you can't enjoy happiness forever."
>> Correct
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