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A beautiful mountain in my country.

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In Jeju Island, there is a Halla Mountain.
All people will know that mountain.
There is a lake called Baengnokdam at the top crater.
Some people go to the Halla Mountain to see the Baengnokdam.
When it is winter, the mountain looks so beautiful, because of the snow.
Therefore, if you go to the Jeju Island, you should go to there.
Thank you!

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In Jeju Island, there is a Halla Mountain.
>> In Jeju Island, there is Halla Mountain.
All people will know that mountain.
>> All people would know that mountain.
There is a lake called Baengnokdam at the top crater.
>> Correct
Some people go to the Halla Mountain to see the Baengnokdam.
>> Some people go to Halla Mountain to see Baengnokdam.
When it is winter, the mountain looks so beautiful, because of the snow.
>> Correct
Therefore, if you go to the Jeju Island, you should go to there.
>> Therefore, if you go to Jeju Island, you should go there.
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