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Young students and generations depend on too much digtal devices and culture.

That is very serious phenemenon.

That is the result of indiscriminate policies and adult's mistakes.

They were not considered the development stage of students reflecting age.

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Thank you for your homework, Lily!

Your hard work will surely pay off!

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Young students and generations depend on too much digtal devices and culture.

>>Correct.
That is very serious phenemenon.

>>That is a very serious phenomenon.
That is the result of indiscriminate policies and adult's mistakes.

>>This is the result of indiscriminate policies and mistakes made by adults. 
They were not considered the development stage of students reflecting age.

>>They did not take into consideration the developmental stage of students that corresponds to their age.


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