무료 레벨테스트 받고 강사평가 남기면 1,OOO원 쿠폰 즉시 적립!

혹시 사이트에선 찾지 못한 궁금한 점이 있으세요?
남겨주신 이메일을 통해 답변 드리겠습니다.

문의하신 내용이 문자로 발송되오니
연락처를 남겨주세요.
업무시간 월~금 오전9시~오후6시
(점심시간 낮12시~오후1시)

영작교정 게시판

영어 말하기와 쓰기를 동시에 잡는다!

자신 있게 쓸 수 있는 영작문을 위해 파워잉글리쉬 수업을 수강하시는
회원님들께 무료로 제공해드리는 부가 서비스로, 전문 분야를 제외한 자유 주제
또는 강사님이 내주시는 과제를 회원님께서 영어로 작성해주시면,
담당 강사 님께서 ‘문법 오류 교정’ 과 ‘더 나은 영어식 표현’으로 교정해주는
서비스 입니다.

homework

작성자: 최*�
2023-11-02 628

회원님의 영작문

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the advantages and disadvantages of having "career parents"?

There are many career parents these days.
I think it's reason there are more up educational levels and don't matter of jobs gender, unlike in the past.
In my opinion, the biggest advantage of career parent will be more stability in financial problems in the family.
And each parents can continue to their jobs, so they can continue their career.
In the case of single income, one of the parents have to stop work.
But career parents also have a disadvantage.
I think the disadvantage of career parents problem of their children's education and growth.
There are many daycare centers these days, so they send their children there from baby.
Sometimes it's not good idea because they spend less time with their children.
But, many parents to choose for continue to their career of job.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the advantages and disadvantages of having "career parents"?

There are many career parents these days.
>> CORRECT!
I think it's reason there are more up educational levels and don't matter of jobs gender, unlike in the past.
>> I think the reason is that there are parents with higher educational levels and don't care about the jobs related to gender, unlike in the past.
In my opinion, the biggest advantage of career parent will be more stability in financial problems in the family.
>> In my opinion, the biggest advantage of career parents will be the financial stability for the family.
And each parents can continue to their jobs, so they can continue their career.
>> Each parents can continue with their jobs, so they can continue with their career.
In the case of single income, one of the parents have to stop work.
>> In the case of single income, one of the parents has to stop working.
But career parents also have a disadvantage.
>> CORRECT!
I think the disadvantage of career parents problem of their children's education and growth.
>> I think the disadvantage of career parents would be their children's education and growth.
There are many daycare centers these days, so they send their children there from baby.
>> There are many daycare centers these days, so they send their children there.
Sometimes it's not good idea because they spend less time with their children.
>> Sometimes it's not a good idea because they spend less time with their children.
But, many parents to choose for continue to their career of job.
>> But, many parents choose to continue doing their jobs.

번호 제목 글쓴이 공개 상태 등록일 조회수
132231 WRITING TASK: Who are you grateful for and why? 임*지 완료 2023-11-07 3
132230 A role of press 임*진 완료 2023-11-07 1085
132229 What do you think is the biggest change in how families are in... 신*정 완료 2023-11-07 923
132228 Homework 정*환 완료 2023-11-07 1502
132227 Why freedome of speech is important 김*아 완료 2023-11-07 1
132226 retirement 권*희 완료 2023-11-07 1197
132225 homework_231106 한*록 완료 2023-11-07 1
132224 homework 김*연 완료 2023-11-06 895
132223 Homework 김*우 완료 2023-11-06 1157
132222 Children\'s future 이*규 완료 2023-11-06 994
132221 homework 김*린 완료 2023-11-06 1
132220 Being active 이*혜 완료 2023-11-06 1
132219 homework 11.06 최*� 완료 2023-11-06 1106
132218 homework 이*숙 완료 2023-11-06 1363
132217 What\'s your thought on rule by law? Give examples of rule by... 김*민 완료 2023-11-06 1
132216 Tell me about your most recent job. 이*윤 완료 2023-11-06 1360
132215 Do you like it when your friend tells you a secret? Why or why... 에*미 완료 2023-11-06 2
132214 The firework I have seen 송*우 완료 2023-11-06 1116
132213 A letter of self introduction 이*주 완료 2023-11-06 942
132212 HOMEWORK: Please write a short paragraph about “Is having free... 앨* 완료 2023-11-06 0

HOW TO USE IT?

[마이페이지 > 수업 내용 보기 > 학습 캘린더 > 영작교정 버튼 클릭]

수업 횟수만큼 영작교정 게시판이 생성되며,
지난 날짜에도 게시 할 수 있습니다.

주5회 수업 : 월 20회 이용 가능
주3회 수업 : 월 12회 이용 가능
주2회 수업 : 월 08회 이용 가능
01
교정 내용은 최대 1,000byte까지 올릴 수 있습니다.

첨부 파일은 원활한 첨삭을 위한 참고자료로 사용될 뿐,
파일에 대한 첨삭은 불가능 합니다.

업로드 가능한 첨부 파일은 최대 2mb까지이며,
첨부 할 수 있는 파일 형식은 다음과 같습니다.

문서 - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
이미지 - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
전문 분야를 제외한 회원님이 직접 작성한 글만
첨삭이 가능하며,

올려주신 글의 강사님 첨삭은 24시간 이내에
완료 되는 것을 원칙으로 하고 있습니다.
03
하루 게시 가능한 글은 3회까지 이며,
종료된 수업의 영작교정 게시판은
이용이 어려운 점 양해 부탁 드립니다.
04

와이즈에듀케이션아이(주) 사이트명: 파워잉글리쉬 대표이사 전상현
사업자등록번호: 217-81-44736 통신판매신고번호: 2014-서울도봉-0233호
서울본사: 서울시 노원구 한글비석로 245 두타빌 B동 7층 713호
대표번호 1688-8672 개인정보관리 책임자: 안희영 [powerenglish@pweng.net]