¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÃÖ*Ç
2023-11-02 944

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the advantages and disadvantages of having "career parents"?

There are many career parents these days.
I think it's reason there are more up educational levels and don't matter of jobs gender, unlike in the past.
In my opinion, the biggest advantage of career parent will be more stability in financial problems in the family.
And each parents can continue to their jobs, so they can continue their career.
In the case of single income, one of the parents have to stop work.
But career parents also have a disadvantage.
I think the disadvantage of career parents problem of their children's education and growth.
There are many daycare centers these days, so they send their children there from baby.
Sometimes it's not good idea because they spend less time with their children.
But, many parents to choose for continue to their career of job.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the advantages and disadvantages of having "career parents"?


There are many career parents these days.
>> CORRECT!
I think it's reason there are more up educational levels and don't matter of jobs gender, unlike in the past.
>> I think the reason is that there are parents with higher educational levels and don't care about the jobs related to gender, unlike in the past.
In my opinion, the biggest advantage of career parent will be more stability in financial problems in the family.
>> In my opinion, the biggest advantage of career parents will be the financial stability for the family.
And each parents can continue to their jobs, so they can continue their career.
>> Each parents can continue with their jobs, so they can continue with their career.
In the case of single income, one of the parents have to stop work.
>> In the case of single income, one of the parents has to stop working.
But career parents also have a disadvantage.
>> CORRECT!
I think the disadvantage of career parents problem of their children's education and growth.
>> I think the disadvantage of career parents would be their children's education and growth.
There are many daycare centers these days, so they send their children there from baby.
>> There are many daycare centers these days, so they send their children there.
Sometimes it's not good idea because they spend less time with their children.
>> Sometimes it's not a good idea because they spend less time with their children.
But, many parents to choose for continue to their career of job.
>> But, many parents choose to continue doing their jobs.

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
135570 Which is heavier,an iphone or a samsung Galaxy phone? Is the... Â÷*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-17 752
135569 What do you think is the perfect age to go to elementary school? Â÷*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-03-17 903
135568 Class suspension ¿°*¿¹ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-17 0
135567 Celebration ¿°*¿¹ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-17 2
135566 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-03-17 860
135565 Pet peeves ¿°*¿¹ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-17 1
135564 The past and the future ¿°*¿¹ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-17 3
135563 Homework ÀÌ*Çý ¿Ï·á 2024-03-16 1
135562 Why is reading a good hobby? Áø*È£ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-16 2
135561 What are some ways businesses can promote diversity and... ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2024-03-16 610
135560 What makes us feel unsuccessful? ÀÌ*À± ¿Ï·á 2024-03-15 753
135559 question and homework ÀÌ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-15 435
135558 Homework Àå*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-15 930
135557 Homework ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-15 0
135556 Danger or safety transportation ÀÌ*È­ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-15 676
135555 homework ÃÖ*Ç ¿Ï·á 2024-03-15 654
135554 2023.03.15 ¼÷Á¦ ¾ç*À² ¿Ï·á 2024-03-15 1
135553 homework ÀÌ*¼÷ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-15 634
135552 Meeting someone halfway ÀÌ*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2024-03-15 752
135551 I like the word \'friendship\'. À±*Çý ¿Ï·á 2024-03-15 1011

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04