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Q: Is Halloween celebration a bad thing? Why or why not?
A: I think usually Halloween celebration is not bad, but sometimes it can be.
Usually Halloween is celebrated because of the fun of children and people, but sometimes it can make children to eat so much sweets.
If then, their health can be worse than before.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for answering your homework!

~T. Divina^^

Here are some things to take note of:

1. I think usually Halloween celebration is not bad, but sometimes it can be.
>>I think that a Halloween celebration is usually not bad, but sometimes it can be.

2. Usually Halloween is celebrated because of the fun of children and people, but sometimes it can make children to eat so much sweets.
>>Halloween is celebrated for the fun of children and people, but sometimes it can make children eat so many sweets.

3. If then, their health can be worse than before.
>>By then, their health can become worse than before.
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