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I think all movies are the best.
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Hi Da Hye,

Your perspective is positive and inclusive. Thinking that all movies are the best is a wonderful way to appreciate the diversity of films. I noticed that your sentences are sometimes incomplete. To improve your writing, try to provide more details or explanations for your ideas. I'm intrigued by your mention of "another reason." Could you share more about that reason? I'd love to hear your thoughts.

~Teacher Cathy

 

I think all movies are the best.

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There is another reason why they are the best movies.

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