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My last gadget

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I think my tablet PC will be the last gadget of mine because I only use it at home and watch YouTube and Netflix. I don't think it can be broken by accident and need many technical to do.

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Hello, Thomas!

I think your answer comes from the perspective of comfort and convenience. Since you can use at in your home, it gives you easy access to this gadget.

Thank you for your homework answer to the question. Your sentences have less mistakes and they contain natural expressions and arrangements of grammar. Well done!

See you soon.

-T. Donna~

I think my tablet PC will be the last gadget of mine because I only use it at home and watch YouTube and Netflix. 
>> Correct!

I don't think it can be broken by accident and need many technical to do.
>> Correct!
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I don't think it can be broken by accident and need many technical things to do.
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