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Hello, T.Donna.
It's a tough Monday.
Since I have a vacation from tomorrow, there were too many patients in the clinic today.
Thus, I was totally exhausted.
Meanwhile, Dr. MJ looked so kind and soft today.
He thanked to me suddenly about my effort as a business partner.
And, he told me that we went through a hard time together.
Lastly, he told me that he will let me retire early.
I am not sure if I can retire early as he said, nevertheless, I was so happy because I could feel his real mind.
I will go to Jeju island tomorrow morning after our class, and meet my doctor friend who lives in Jeju and has a recording room in the evening.
He has a good talent as a vocalist.
We will have a delicious raw fish and sing together.
My wife have a plan to stay a good hotel and have delicious food everyday.
We will have a great time.
Regarding my homework, I just want every politicians and medias to do nothing about medical fields.
They always uses a doctor as a tool of popularity.
See you tomorrow.

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Hi there, Dr. Kim!

I agree that yesterday must be challenging yet for you, it is vacation time today! It is good to know that you survived Monday to have a vacation the next day. 

The icing on top of the cake is Dr. MJ's compassion and gentle thoughts about your vacation as well as well-being of retiring early. Although I am not quite sure if you mean retiring from work yesterday or retiring totally from work in the future, it is still sweet for him to recognized your valuable efforts to keep your clinic organized, well-balanced, and earning so well.

By now, you are enjoying your time in Jeju Island. Is the weather spectacular there today? It is time  to bask under the bright sunlight, stare at the vast sea, eat sumptuous food, and feel peaceful there for this week.

Your sentences below are mostly correct ones. For the grammar points, kindly read them carefully below. You have done excellently.

See you soon!

-T. Donna~

Hello, T.Donna.
>> Correct!

It's a tough Monday.
>> Correct!

Since I have a vacation from tomorrow, there were too many patients in the clinic today.
>> Correct!

Thus, I was totally exhausted.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, Dr. MJ looked so kind and soft today.
>> Correct!

He thanked to me suddenly about my effort as a business partner.
>> Correct!

And, he told me that we went through a hard time together.
>> Correct!

Lastly, he told me that he will let me retire early.
>> Correct!

I am not sure if I can retire early as he said, nevertheless, I was so happy because I could feel his real mind.
>> Correct!

I will go to Jeju island tomorrow morning after our class, and meet my doctor friend who lives in Jeju and has a recording room in the evening.
>> Correct!

He has a good talent as a vocalist.
>> Correct!

We will have a delicious raw fish and sing together.
>> Correct!

My wife have a plan to stay a good hotel and have delicious food everyday.
>> My wife has a plan to stay in a good hotel and have delicious food everyday.

We will have a great time.
>> Correct!

Regarding my homework, I just want every politicians and medias to do nothing about medical fields.
>> Regarding my homework, I just want every politician and media to do nothing about the medical fields.

They always uses a doctor as a tool of popularity.
>> They always uses the doctors as a tool of popularity.

See you tomorrow.
>> Correct!

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