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What is your philosophy in life?

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My philosophy in life is a very short and famous idiom : "I can do it, just do it." and "No pain, no gain."
Two sentences are simple but very strong and impressed.
It gives me high self-esteem.
I've always believed that I stand up for myself and become very strong myself.
I strongly believe that the key to high self-esteem is self-confidence.
It measn giving new power to team member around you with belief that I can do it myself.

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Good morning, Yun. Thanks for this. This is great. I suggest elaborating more on how your philosophy can be beneficial to your work ethics. That could also be an additional help. Nevertheless, excellent job here. See you in our next class! 
~T. Jade^^

Homework: What is your philosophy in life?
My philosophy in life is a very short and famous idiom: "I can do it, just do it." and "No pain, no gain."
>> Correct
Two sentences are simple but very strong and impressed.
>> These two sentences are simple but very strong and impressive.
>> OR: These two sentences are simple yet very powerful and impressive.

It gives me high self-esteem.
>> Correct
I've always believed that I stand up for myself and become very strong myself.
>> I've always believed in standing up for myself and becoming a stronger person.
I strongly believe that the key to high self-esteem is self-confidence.
>> Correct
It measn giving new power to team member around you with belief that I can do it myself.
>> It means giving new power to team members around you with the belief that I can do it myself.

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