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Do you think all world leaders are intelligent?

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2023-10-27 845

회원님의 영작문

It seems to be a difficult question.
Not everyone seems smart. This is because smart people are not the only leaders. I think people who work with leaders are smarter than leaders? I think.
Questions arise about what smart is, but it seems to be wise.
If the leader is wise, the group goes faster than the others. There are certainly leaders who are not wise in this respect. This is because there are many countries on earth where the living common people cannot live properly due to hunger and poverty.
Even if all leaders around the world are not smart, efforts to listen to the people of the country and go further are essential.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Ye Lim,

You've made a thoughtful point about world leaders and their intelligence. It's true that not all leaders may appear intelligent because leadership qualities can vary. You raise an interesting perspective that those who work with leaders may sometimes be smarter. Wisdom and the ability to make wise decisions are indeed vital for effective leadership. The focus on listening to the people and addressing the needs of the common people is essential, regardless of a leader's intelligence level. Your viewpoint is insightful and highlights the importance of leadership qualities beyond intelligence. Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this matter.

~Teacher Cathy

 

It seems to be a difficult question.

>>CORRECT

OR>>This appears to be a challenging question.

Not everyone seems smart.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Not all individuals come across as intelligent.

This is because smart people are not the only leaders.

>>This is because leaders aren't the only smart people.

I think people who work with leaders are smarter than leaders? I think.

>>I think people who work with leaders are smarter than leaders, I think.

Questions arise about what smart is, but it seems to be wise.

>>Questions arise about what it means to be smart, but it appears to be related to wisdom.

If the leader is wise, the group goes faster than the others.

>>CORRECT

OR>>When the leader is wise, the group tends to outpace the others.

There are certainly leaders who are not wise in this respect.

>> There are leaders who are certainly not wise in this aspect.

This is because there are many countries on earth where the living common people cannot live properly due to hunger and poverty.

>>This is because there are many countries on earth where the common people cannot live properly due to hunger and poverty.

Even if all leaders around the world are not smart, efforts to listen to the people of the country and go further are essential.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Even if leaders worldwide may not be exceptionally intelligent, it remains crucial for them to make an effort to listen to their citizens and progress.

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