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What kinds of social problems does alcohol cause in your country?

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Well, there's famous drunk driving in my country. Except for that, it's motiveless crime. There are no reason and no motivation to injure other people. Just, people who are drunk walk around somewhere to do it, only they got eyes contact. I guess they who did got experiences about isolation from society, solitude, and etc. On top of that, the anger that has been built up and suffered has been marked off. It sounds so sad.

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Good day, Eric!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
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Well, there's famous drunk driving in my country. 
>> Well, drunk driving is famous in my country. 
Except for that, it's motiveless crime. 
>> Except for that, it's a motiveless crime. 
There are no reason and no motivation to injure other people. 
>> There are no reasons or motives to injure other people. 
Just, people who are drunk walk around somewhere to do it, only they got eyes contact. 
>> Just, people who are drunk walk around somewhere to do it, only they got an eye contact. 
I guess they who did got experiences about isolation from society, solitude, and etc. 
>> I guess they, who did it, got experiences about isolation from society, solitude, and etc. 
On top of that, the anger that has been built up and suffered has been marked off. 
>> CORRECT!
It sounds so sad.
>> CORRECT!

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