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What do you think the punishment for drunk driving should be?

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Of course, it should be stronger as time goes. Also, from where I sit, the government shouldn't give them a chance to drive again. Especially in South Korea, they're so generous with drunk driving. Fortunately, the punishment has been tightening. In addition to that, it should be more before an issue causes.

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Good day, Eric!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


Of course, it should be stronger as time goes. 
>> CORRECT!
Also, from where I sit, the government shouldn't give them a chance to drive again.
>> CORRECT!
Especially in South Korea, they're so generous with drunk driving. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Especially in South Korea, they're so lenient with drunk driving. 
Fortunately, the punishment has been tightening. 
>> CORRECT!
In addition to that, it should be more before an issue causes.
>> In addition to that, it should be more strict before an issue causes.


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