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About my dream house.

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2023-10-26 2077

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I don't have been thinking about this topic! so i feel interesting to think about this!
Q. Apartment to a house?
Today l live in an apartment downtown, but I hope my dream house is big luxury house with yard and swimming pool.

Q. Where is it located?
Last homework time we talk about "live anywhere else, where would that be?", i told Jeju island.
So i hope my dream house lacated in Jeju island. It has wonderful sea and nature.

Q. Why is it your dream house?
It has swimming pool and big yard.
I'm not good at swimming but i like water. and i go on a vacation almost sea or swimming pool.
So my dream house must have swimming pool
My dream house must have yard.
because, I have a lovely puppy, he likes play yard!
he's name is ¹ø°³! It means the lighting in the weather.
When we met him first time, he show our family how he speedy with whoosh whoosh sound.
that's why his name ¹ø°³.

If i could live dream house, i hope enjoy swim and play yard with my family! Including lovely puppy, too!

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Good morning, Angela!
It's nice to think of our plans and I hope that in the future we will be able to start building our plans.
Have a great day!
Aki~ 

I don't have been thinking about this topic! so i feel interesting to think about this!
>>> I never thought about this topic so I feel interested in it.
>>> This got me interested because I haven't thought about this yet.

Q. Apartment to a house?
Today l live in an apartment downtown, but I hope my dream house is big luxury house with yard and swimming pool.
>>>  Today l live in an apartment downtown, but I hope to have a big luxury house with a yard and swimming pool.

Q. Where is it located?
Last homework time we talk about "live anywhere else, where would that be?", i told Jeju island.
>>>  I mentioned in my homework the last time that I wanted to live in Jeju Island.

So i hope my dream house lacated in Jeju island. It has wonderful sea and nature.
>> So I hope that my dream house is located on Jeju Island which has a wonderful view of the sea and nature.

Q. Why is it your dream house?
It has swimming pool and big yard.
>>> It has a swimming pool and a big yard.

I'm not good at swimming but i like water. and i go on a vacation almost sea or swimming pool.
>>> I'm not good at swimming but I like water. and I go on a vacation almost at the sea or swimming pool.

So my dream house must have swimming pool.
>>> So my dream house must have a swimming pool.

My dream house must have yard.
>>>  My dream house must have a yard.

because, I have a lovely puppy, he likes play yard!
>>> Because I have a lovely puppy, he likes to play in the yard!

he's name is ¹ø°³! It means the lighting in the weather.
>>> His name is ¹ø°³! It means the lighting in the weather.

When we met him first time, he show our family how he speedy with whoosh whoosh sound.  that's why his name ¹ø°³.
>>>  When we met him the first time, he showed our family how he was speedy with whoosh whoosh sound.  that's why his name ¹ø°³.

If i could live dream house, i hope enjoy swim and play yard with my family! Including lovely puppy, too!
>>> If I could live in my dream house, I hope to enjoy swimming and playing in the yard with my family! Including my lovely puppy.

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