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I have experienced the terrible nearly dying twice. One was that I fell down from mountain, the other was that I faced with a thief with a knife. In my late thirties, I had membership training with my coworkers in Soraksan. We stayed at a mountain cabin. At night I went out of cabin to find toilet. The toilet was away from the cabin and it was very dark. I lost the way to toilet, so I hurried to find. At that time I tripped over a roct and I fell down to the side. Luckily I was huny at the trees. I survived

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Hi, Gi Yean!
Thank you for sharing these stories with me. I understand that they might evoke traumatic feelings, but your willingness to share them is appreciated. I'm glad that you were able to survive and overcome the trauma associated with these experiences.
- T. Caitlyn
I have experienced the terrible nearly dying twice. 
>> I have experienced nearly dying twice.
One was that I fell down from mountain, the other was that I faced with a thief with a knife. 
>> One was when i fell down the mountain and the other was when facing a thief who has a knife.
In my late thirties, I had membership training with my coworkers in Soraksan. 
>> CORRECT
We stayed at a mountain cabin. 
>> CORRECT
At night I went out of cabin to find toilet. 
>> At night, I went out of the cabin to find the toilet
The toilet was away from the cabin and it was very dark. 
>> CORRECT
I lost the way to toilet, so I hurried to find. 
>> I lost my way to the toilet, so I hurried to find it.
At that time I tripped over a roct and I fell down to the side. 
>> At that time, I tripped over a rock and I fell to the side.
Luckily I was huny at the trees. 
>> Luckily, I found myself hanging from the trees.
I survived
>> I survived.
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