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Korea is not big and we don't have big heritages as many as China.

If you are in twenties, I'd like to recommend Seoul because there is the center of popular culture and heaven of shopping.

Ane public transpotation is very convenient compare to the other cities.

But if you are in fifties like me, Jeju island is better place than Seoul.

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Thank you for your homework, Lily!

Your dedication is impressive!

-Hanna ^^

Korea is not big and we don't have big heritages as many as China.

>>Korea is not a large country, and we don't have as many grand heritages as China.
If you are in twenties, I'd like to recommend Seoul because there is the center of popular culture and heaven of shopping.

>>If you are in your twenties, I'd like to recommend Seoul because it is the center of popular culture and a shopping paradise.
Ane public transpotation is very convenient compare to the other cities.

>>Public transportation is also very convenient compared to other cities. 
But if you are in fifties like me, Jeju island is better place than Seoul.

>>But if you are in your fifties, like me, Jeju Island is a better place than Seoul.


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