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After school, I went to snack shop to eat fishcake. I ate 2red fishcake and it was really delicous. Next my friend bought me a ice cream so that was delicious to.after that we went to play in playground, we just ride a swing. Also there was nothing to do, so we practice dance name slip back, there is famous korea that dance like he is floating howeber, that become very famous and that also looked fun so me and my friends practiced it however, we don't even danced closed

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Hello Jude, happy day to you! I really like fishcake. I'm glad to know that you enjoy eating snacks with your friends as well as you enjoy doing various activities with them. We will talk more in class about this. I will see you then. Have a great day to you and always be careful! ~T. Lyn
After school, I went to snack shop to eat fishcake. 
>>After school, I went to a snack bar and ate fish cake.
I ate 2red fishcake and it was really delicous. 
>>I ate two red fish cakes and they were really delicious. 
Next my friend bought me a ice cream so that was delicious to.
>>Then he just went to the playground to play and ride on the swings.
after that we went to play in playground, we just ride a swing. 
>>Next, my friend bought me ice cream and it was delicious. 
Also there was nothing to do, so we practice dance name slip back, there is famous korea that dance like he is floating howeber, that become very famous and that also looked fun so me and my friends practiced it however, we don't even danced closed
>>Also, because I had nothing else to do, I practiced the name "Slipback". There is a place in Korea where you dance like you're floating, and it became very famous and seemed fun, so my friends and I practiced, but we never did it. The dance was really hard to follow and we were not close enough.
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