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Homework - \'How to overcome difficult times.\'

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2023-10-25 837

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Wow.. So difficult homework for me.
But I guess i can do it.
Actually, The resume of the company I applied has the same content.
Let me write down this contents.

I have ever overcome difficult times before.
It was when I failed for the driver license seven times.
If you read this, you can be surprised.
But, It was real happening.
The way I overcome this situation was to analyze why I failed the test.
And then I looked for the peace of the mind and took a rest in my house.
As a result, I got a driver license.
That time, I realized a way can overcome a hard time myself.
Also, I was in a slump about my life. so I used this way.
That was really effective.
Overall, I think looking for the peace of the mind and taking a rest is the best way can overcome difficult times.

It is a secret that I hang out with my friends while i study these days.
Thank you for revising always!
See you tomorrow!

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Trying and failing seven times is really discouraging. So it's impressive that you didn't give up. And you know I believe that if we want something, we really need to work hard for it just like what you did. If I were in your situation I might lose hope and question my ability. Maybe taking time to reflect is one of the best things to do in times of difficulties for us to think thoroughly about the situation. ^_^ Never give up!
-Chammy
Wow.. So difficult homework for me.
>>Correct 
But I guess i can do it.
>>But I guess I can do it.
Actually, The resume of the company I applied has the same content.
>>Actually, the resume for the company I applied to has the same content.
Let me write down this contents.
>>Let me write down those contents.
I have ever overcome difficult times before.
>> I have overcome difficult times before.
It was when I failed for the driver license seven times.
>> It was when I failed my driver's license seven times.
If you read this, you can be surprised.
>>Correct
OR
>>If you read this, you would be surprised.
But, It was real happening.
>>But, it really happened.
The way I overcome this situation was to analyze why I failed the test.
>>The way I overcame this situation was by analyzing why I failed the test.
And then I looked for the peace of the mind and took a rest in my house.
>>Correct
As a result, I got a driver license.
>> As a result, I got a driver's license.
That time, I realized a way can overcome a hard time myself.
>>That time, I realized a way to overcome a hard time by myself.
Also, I was in a slump about my life. so I used this way.
>>Also, I was in a slump about my life. So, I use this way.
That was really effective.
>>Correct
Overall, I think looking for the peace of the mind and taking a rest is the best way can overcome difficult times.
>>Overall, I think looking for peace of mind and taking a rest is the best way to overcome difficult times.
It is a seret that I hang out with my friends while i study these days.
>>It is a secret that I hang out with my friends while I study these days.
Thank you for revising always!
See you tomorrow!
>>Correct
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